Jack/ Taillow

[Dustomega]

Human Information
Name: Jack
Age: 14
Gender: Male

Personality: Jack is a nice guy who tries his best to stay on everyones' good side. Even though he tries to be friendly, he sometimes says the wrong thing and gets on people's nerves. However, he does this on purpose to his friends.

History: Jack has a so-so life. His parents died a year after he was born, and after that he lived with his Aunt Sam. Jack has one good friend named Jake. Jake and Jack were very alike. They both liked video gamed, anime, and manga. At school Jack was the kid that everyone liked and no one hated. When he was at home he stayed in his room watching anime on the computer, listening to his favorite band CRUSH 40, and playing video games like Halo 3. Jack had a good life. His aunt was nice, never spoiled him, and he had great friends.

Pokemon Information
Pokemon Taillow

Level: 10
Moves: Peck, Growl, Focus Energy, Quick Attack

stats

weak to:
* Rock : 2×
* Electric : 2×
* Ice : 2×

Resistant to :
* Bug : ½×
* Grass : ½×

Immune to:
* Ground : 0×
* Ghost : 0×

Normal effectiveness
* Normal : 1×
* Fighting : 1×
* Flying : 1×
* Poison : 1×
* Steel : 1×
* Fire : 1×
* Water : 1×
* Psychic : 1×
* Dragon : 1×
* Dark : 1×

[Pikachu]

Okay, first off, spelling and grammar mistakes. With your permission I can fix them for you if you want (as admin I have the ability to edit posts).

However, I do think you can expand on the history a little bit more. Try looking at some of the other people's histories to get an idea on how to improve on it.

[Dustomega]

yea I really need to improve on my grammar.
If you want to fix it go ahead but, show me where I messed up at.

[Pikachu]

Alright then:
-try should be tries
-everyones should be everyone's
-tho should be though
-A comma is needed after friendly
-peoples should be people's
-A period is needed after nerve.
-perpus should be purpose
-Friends should be friends.
-You put Jake instead of Jack
-his should be His
-Period needed after born.
-ant (everytime it appears) should be Aunt.
-A period is needed after alike.
-jack should be Jack (whenever it appears)
-when should be When
-Anime should be anime
-lessoning should be listening
- That last sentence needs commas after nice and him. You also get rid of the ands in that case.

Just to ask, and I'm not trying to be rude, but is English your first language?

[Dustomega]

yes

[Pikachu]

Okay then. Well, I'll go make the changes now.