Yamato Shimizu

[fox]

Character Name: Yamato Shimizu
Age:25
Gender:male

Description:he is very muscular and tall.has green eyes with black hair with a scar on his chin.he has a black t-shirt with blue genes and a chain belt. he has black leather boots with tiny tiny spikes on them.he has a go-t and a chain necklace.

Personality: he acts like a bad person around people he doesn't no.he likes to tell jokes and play around sometimes.he really likes to fight and go to bars with Friends.he likes challenges and adventures loaded with a action.

History: his parents was strict, mean and very poor.his dad was in bars a lot. he always flat and got in trouble. his mom was a normal house wife. she sated at home and cleaned and cooked.they all lived on a farm and thats where yamato was raised at for most of his life.
he met sachi and bin one day wen he was walking in the forest one day. they became very close Friends and had many adventures together.bin cares a dagger that yamato made him and sachi cares a staff also mad by yamato. yamato turned age 21 he moved out and started a new life in ba-sing-sei he got a gob at a mail career. he was at home it was a normal day he felt kind of weird he past out. wen he woke up he felt lots of power he ran out side and tried to bend noting he tried again noting he tried one More time he lifted a bolder off the ground. he went to look for the Avatar to help stop this war.

Fighting Style: earth bender and swords

Equipment/Tools/Pets: he has one long big samurai sword on his back.

[Pikachu]

Uhm, fox, I really hope this a joke. Spelling is atrocious, grammar is bad, and overall I have to say no. I suggest you look at some of the other profiles to get an idea of what we are looking for.

[morfowt]

you forgot to mention name is not asian (though I'm not sure if that's mandatory)

[Digital ♥]

I`m going to go ahead and fix some capitalization and grammatical things to make it sound a little bit better, if you dont mind that is. Now I wont change anything, you can if you`d like, but if you changes a couple of things it might help your character get the accepted marker. And if I might make a suggestion, avoid using He to start every sentence if you can. It makes things kind of boring if you know what I mean (even if I do it all too often xD call me a hypocrite lol )

Description: He is very muscular and tall. He also has green eyes with black hair with a scar on his chin. He has a black t-shirt with blue genes and a chain belt. He has black leather boots with tiny tiny spikes on them. He has a go-t and a chain necklace.

Personality: He acts like a bad person around people he doesn't no. He likes to tell jokes and play around sometimes. He really likes to fight and go to bars with friends. He likes challenges and adventures loaded with a action.

History: His parents was strict, mean and very poor. His dad was in bars a lot. He always flat and got in trouble. His mom was a normal house wife. She stayed at home and cleaned and cooked. They all lived on a farm and thats where Yamato was raised at for most of his life. He met Sachi and Bin one day wen he was walking in the forest one day. They became very close friends and had many adventures together. Bin cares a dagger that Yamato made him and Sachi cares a staff also mad by Yamato. Yamato turned age 21 he moved out and started a new life in ba-sing-sei he got a gob at a mail career. He was at home it was a normal day he felt kind of weird he past out. When he woke up he felt a lot of power he ran out side and tried to bend noting he tried again noting he tried one more time he lifted a boulder off the ground. He went to look for the Avatar to help stop this war.

Fighting Style: Earth bender and swords

Equipment/Tools/Pets: He has one long big samurai sword on his back.

Well there is only one or two big problems that I can see with the history (other than the spelling/capitals/etc as stated above. ). No bender, not even the avatar, can just roll out of bed one morning and just bend a boulder or whatnot. Bending takes time to learn, and I doubt that Yamato wouldnt know he was a bender until he was twenty one. And if that was the case, and he just didnt care to learn all of those years, he wouldnt be totally pro in four years. He could be close, but master bending takes many many years, unless it comes naturally (teehe im a cheater xP ). I assume that you`d want him to be good at it, if not disregard that last bit.

The second problem would be that he should have a reason to go seek out the avatar. Did he have a personal experience that made him want to help the avatar end the war, such as a death to a family member/friend/etc? Maybe he witnessed something terrible happen to innocent people? Or perhaps something bad happened to him to want to end the war (such as him being locked up in a fire nation prison after going on a raid in the military). You know what I mean right? Actions need motives, and motives come from personal experience.

If you need any help with anything feel free to ask me. I`d be happy to work with you to come up with something. =]

[Pikachu]

Furthermore, in the physical description, no one looks like that in the Avatar universe. They don't have t-shirts and jeans and all that other stuff.

Oh, and on the history, it would be nice to explain where he learned swordsmanship and got the sword. If he's supposed to be from a dirt poor family, that's not something he can do easily. You'd also have to explain where he got the skills to make a dagger for the same reason.

And I will require you to go to the Pikachu's School of Roleplaying before you'll be allowed to post in the actual forum rps.